I have been dirty for about 4 months now and people have written “Wash Me” on me about 13 times now. Do you know who I am? I am a window on the back of a Mercedes Benz. All the other windows on the car look nice and clean, but not me. I feel left out. What have I done to deserve this? All I want is some water and soap and I’ll be good as new. Is that too much to ask for?
People constantly get into the car and drive off without even thinking about how I feel. They look through me, but can’t see how sad I am. They can’t figure out that I just want to be clean, like all the other windows on the car. One day some new guy got in the car and was driving me around. All the way I was getting more and more dirty and angrier by the minute. I started to get excited when along the way I show a car wash, but we just drove by. He stopped at the grocery store and picked up all his groceries and got back in. I saw the car wash on the way back, but didn’t think anything of it. Then there was a sudden squeal of the wheels and in two seconds we were in the car wash line. It was finally my turn and we went into the car wash. We came out and I was so happy I was finally clean. I am finally no longer dirty; people won’t write “Wash Me” on me anymore. Instead they won’t be able to write anything on me because I am to clean
I like this piece is good detail and all of that i think you could fix your first sentence though.
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